From dawn to dusk,
I walked the roads, messily,
Permeating through crowds,
Moving through unmoving masses,
Absorbing their indifference
or coming to terms with my own invisibility,
Letting the pits get better of me,
Remembering the barriers as milieus,
Slowing down under the trees,
Pacing out the sun in least possible time,
And wondering how much of me they retained,
And how much of them made inroads into me.
April 19, 2007
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It's interesting to compare the times taken to write a poem and to read it. I think this one took you a long time to write.
Wonderful poetry! I loved the last two lines...nature, environment and circumstances do sink into us, and I really wonder if they retain even a vestige of us!
[Vibhav]
I chose not to have any rhyme for my 'messy' walk; and this freedom considerably reduced the time spent in writing.
I must've taken the longest time in writing and modifying the two lines of 'zindagii tujhe kai baar..', if we are into length vs time comparison here.
[Tap]
Thanx!
I can't say much! I'd be the last person to write 'nature poetry'.(Not that I dislike, it's just that I simply can't write). Everything in this poem- trees, sun, are people, and even these words have occured for the first time in my poetry.
I read it as 'the individual and/vs. the collective' and liked it. goes well with the theme of your blog as well. the physical description of the city was very vivid, and nicely suggestive of deeper meanings. didnt really notice the 'nature' there as I was too focused on its interaction with the individual!
Yeah, Siyaah, I didn't notice it goes so well with the theme of my blog! would put it into the sidebar sometime.
Liked ur interpretation of the poem as 'the individual and/vs. the collective'. My thoughts while writing it were mostly on the similar lines.
and between all this one post made an appearance n den disappeared :)
[Desperado]
That was an impulse, and impulses must die however profound they are. :)
why we dont we learn to trust those impluses
(more for me than you)
'coz, may be, our experiences in trusting them are bad. Well-thought-out decisions are better, they say.
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