Kabhii yaaro.n zindagii mein
Kho jaaye.n jo hum kahii.n,
Dhoondhna ujaalo.n mein humein,
Ke humein itna to hai yakii.n--
Andhero.n mein andhera bankar
khonewaaale to hum nahii.n.
Kho jaaye.n jo hum kahii.n,
Dhoondhna ujaalo.n mein humein,
Ke humein itna to hai yakii.n--
Andhero.n mein andhera bankar
khonewaaale to hum nahii.n.
15 comments:
Hey... Long time... Where are you?? :)
Beautiful...very optimistic! Finally a piece of poetry which doesn't lull to sadness
kya baat hai..kahir humari dua yahi hai ki aap kahin na khoye...aur aapka hausla dekh ke lagta bhi nahin ki aisa kuch hoga :)
Real good. I guess you posted a four-line version before. I liked that better.
Too good! I loved that "andhero me andhera bankar" concept...
hey!
nice one...
I however tend to concur with Vibhav,
I also landed up earlier when your four-line version was up, and that was very good.
ujale mein rahoge to kho hi jaoge mere liye
meri ankhon ko ab raushni mein dekhne ki adat nhi rahi...
...and u've been tagged
High on life! Way to go!!!
Kaha ho ?? Ab tumhe kaunse ujalo me dhoonde :P
nice one. good to read something optimistic...though i thought it would be otherwise from the starting lines...
[Canary]
Hi! good to see you back.
[Akshay]
Thanks. Poetry continues to imitate life :)
[Desperado]
Shukriya! Zindagii hai dost! Kabhi hauslo.n ka zor raha, kabhi bebasi muskura uthi!
[Vibhav]
So good of you to let me know. Lesson learnt: In poetry, unnecessary detailing can undo the effect. :)
[Taps]
Sadly, I couldn't incorporate that within the four lines I started with. Seems what was undid was better than what is messily brought in. :)
[Geetanjali]
Glad to know that my blog is read appreciably frequently :)
[Phoenix]
Ray Ban for you, ma'am..! :P
Beautiful line vaise :)
[P4]
...done
[Realistic Me....]
Yes. Thanks! How you doin'?
[Taps]
Maybe red light? Nah, that idea would be cliched. Would tell you first thing when I know it myself.
[Siyaah]
Poetry isn't coming that effortlessly these days :(
yaar ..ye waala already fundoo hai.. par kya mujhe the-more-appreciated 4 liner mil sakta hai??
"Kabhii yaaro.n zindagii mein
Kho jaaye.n jo hum kahii.n...
Dhoondhna ujaalo.n mein humein
-Andhero.n mein khonewaaale hum nahii.n"
- Quite similar. :)
Digging the old pages of my blog, eh? Thanks for showing the interest. :)
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